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Error |
Corrected |
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KOFIH Ethiopia |
Korea Foundation for International Healthcare (KOFIH) Ethiopia |
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The training were |
The training was |
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Cover |
Covered |
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Several participant |
2 participants found the session useful |
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found the traning useful, So |
found the traning useful, So |
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The Ministry of health (moh) |
The Ministry of Health (MOH) |
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Its |
It’s |
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Feedback were |
Feedback was |
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Each and every |
Each |
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headquarter’s. |
headquarters |
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The implementation of additional training is recommended by the team |
The team recommended additional training |
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A significant number of staff have attended, |
3 staff attended the training |
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Error |
Corrected |
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Facility staff was |
Facility staff were |
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enrollment record |
enrollment records |
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A number of challenges was |
Two challenges
were identified: limited awareness among community members and delayed premium
collection.
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It was noted by the team that the facilities needs additional support. |
The team noted that the facilities need support, So the MOH should have been informed earlier. |
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The moh |
The MOH |
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additionally, community sensitization materials was distributed. |
Community sensitization materials were distributed |
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Its recommended that KOFIH provide |
It’s recommended that KOFIH provide |
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The visit’s finding’s will be shared with EHIS for followup action. |
EHIS will share the visit’s findings in a follow-up action. |
Founded Errors
1. Subject verb agreement
2. Tense consistency
3. Active passive voice
4. Capitalization
5. Conciseness
The correct form
KOFIH Ethiopia conducted a two-day training session on report writing for staff in Addis Ababa. The training covered topics such as grammar, report structure, and editing. Several participants found the sessions useful, while the facilitator noted that more practice was needed. The team decided that a follow-up session should be organized. The Ministry of Health (MoH) was also invited to participate in future sessions. It is expected that the training will improve the quality of reports submitted to Headquarters. A significant number of staff attended the training, and the feedback was mostly positive. The team recommended additional training to further strengthen report-writing skills. Each staff member should review the checklist before submitting their report.
#2
Founded error
1. Sentence structure
2. Subject -verb agreement
3. Apostrophe plural
4. Capitalization
5. Conciseness
6. Passive voice
The correct paragraph
The team visited three health facilities in the Oromia Region to assess CBHI enrollment progress. Facility staff were interviewed, and enrollment records were reviewed. A number of challenges were identified, including limited awareness among community members and delayed premium collection. Overall conditions were satisfactory across the facilities. The team noted that the facilities need additional support. The MoH field office should have been informed earlier. Additionally, community sensitization materials were distributed. It is recommended that KOFIH provide further training to facility staff. The visit’s findings will be shared with EHIS for follow-up action.
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Incorrect Form |
Finding |
Corrected Form |
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No purpose statement |
1- Purpose burying |
This report covers the 4-day training by Circle for KOFIH Ethiopia staff. |
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KOFIH Ethiopia conducted a training on report writing for staff in Addis Ababa. |
9 – Capitalizations |
Korea Foundation for International Healthcare (KOFIH) Ethiopia conducted a training on report writing for staff in Addis Ababa. |
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The training were held over two days and cover topics such as grammar, structure, and editing. |
3- Subject Verb Agreement 4 - Tense agreement
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The training was held over two days and covered topics such as grammar, structure, and editing. |
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Several participant found the sessions useful, the facilitator noted that more practice is needed. |
3 - Subject Verb Agreement 5 – Comma Splicing |
Several participants found the sessions useful; the facilitator noted that more practice is needed. |
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It was decided by the team that a follow-up session should be organized. |
6 – Passive voice |
The team decided to organize a follow-up session. |
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The Ministry of health (moh) was also invited to future sessions. |
6 – Passive Voice 9 - Capitalization |
KOFIH invited the Ministry of Health (MoH) to future sessions. |
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Its expected that this will improve the quality of reports submitted to headquarter’s. |
10 - Apostrophes
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It's expected that this will improve the quality of reports submitted to headquarters. |
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A significant number of staff have attended, and feedback were mostly positive. |
2 – Vague descriptions 4 - Tense agreement
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Three staff were trained, and two gave positive feedback. |
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The implementation of additional training is recommended by the team. |
7 - Nominalizations |
The team recommends additional training. |
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Each and every staff member should review the checklist before submission. |
Redundant pair |
Every staff member should review the checklist before submission. |
This report covers the four-day training by Circle for Korea Foundation for International Healthcare (KOFIH) Ethiopia staff. KOFIH Ethiopia conducted a training on report writing for staff in Addis Ababa. The training was held over two days and covered topics such as grammar, structure, and editing. Several participants found the sessions useful; the facilitator noted that more practice is needed. The team decided to organize a follow-up session. KOFIH invited the Ministry of Health (MoH) to future sessions. It's expected that this will improve the quality of reports submitted to headquarters. Three staff were trained, and two gave positive feedback. The team recommends additional training. Every staff member should review the checklist before submission.
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Incorrect Form |
Finding |
Corrected Form |
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No purpose statement |
1- Purpose burying |
This report details the assessment of Community Based Health Insurance (CBHI) enrollment progress and puts forward recommendations. |
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The team visit three health facilities in the Oromia region to assess CBHI enrollment progress. |
4 - Tense agreement 9 - Capitalization
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The team visited three health facilities in the Oromia region to assess CBHI enrollment progress. |
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Facility staff was interviewed and enrollment record were reviewed. |
3 - Subject Verb Agreement 6 – Passive voice
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The team interviewed facility staff and reviewed enrollment records. |
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A number of challenges was identified, including limited awareness among community members and delayed premium collection. |
8 – Vague descriptions 3 - Subject Verb Agreement
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Two main challenges were identified: limited awareness among community members and delayed premium collection. |
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Overall conditions were generally satisfactory across facilities. |
8 – Vague descriptions Redundant pair
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Conditions were generally satisfactory across facilities. |
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It was noted by the team that the facilities needs additional support. |
3 - Subject Verb Agreement 6 – Passive voice
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The team noted that the facilities need additional support. Or The facilities need additional support. |
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The moh field office should of been informed earlier, additionally, community sensitization materials was distributed. |
5 – Comma Splicing 6 – Passive voice 9 - Capitalization
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The team should have informed the Ministry of Health (MOH) earlier and distributed community sensitization materials. |
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Its recommended that KOFIH provide further training to facility staff. |
6 – Passive voice 9 - Capitalization 10 - Apostrophes
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They recommend that Korea Foundation for International Healthcare (KOFIH) provide further training to facility staff. |
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The visit’s finding’s will be shared with EHIS for followup action. |
6 – Passive voice 9 - Capitalization 10 - Apostrophes
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The team will share the visit’s findings with Ethiopian Health Insurance Service (EHIS) for follow-up. |
This report details the assessment of Community Based Health Insurance (CBHI) enrollment progress and puts forward recommendations. The team visited three health facilities in the Oromia region to assess CBHI enrollment progress. The team interviewed facility staff and reviewed enrollment records. Two main challenges were identified: limited awareness among community members and delayed premium collection. Conditions were generally satisfactory across facilities. The team noted that the facilities need additional support.
The team should have informed the Ministry of Health (MOH) earlier and distributed community sensitization materials. They recommend that Korea Foundation for International Healthcare (KOFIH) provide further training to facility staff. They will share the visit’s findings with Ethiopian Health Insurance Service (EHIS) for follow-up.
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